Hi everyone, this is the first draft of my short story. My main concern is the ending. Does it feel satisfying, or is it too abrupt? I'm also unsure if my main character, Leo, is likeable."
Reviewer 1 (using the framework):
Like: "I was completely hooked by the tension in the middle. The dialogue between Leo and his sister was fantastic."
Wonder: "I wondered about the last line. It felt a bit cryptic, and I wasn't sure what it meant for Leo's future."
Ask: "I'd ask if you could add just one more sentence after the last line to give a hint of his emotional state, which might make the ending feel more complete without spelling everything out."
Reviewer 2:
Like: "I found Leo very relatable, especially in the first few paragraphs where he's struggling with self-doubt."
Wonder: "I did wonder why he lied to his friend in chapter two. It made me like him a bit less, which might be your intention, but I wasn't sure."
Ask: "Perhaps you could add a quick line showing his guilt after the lie? That would help me stay connected to him."
By the end of this discussion, the writer has clear, actionable, and kind feedback specifically about the concerns they raised.
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