Concise Writing

This article will teach you strategies to improve concision in writing, like using straightforward sentence structure.

At the heart of business is the idea that "time is money". This may lead you to believe that shorter messages are always better; however, concise writing is not just fast or short. Sometimes your writing must balance the clarity of the message with efficiency.


Sentence Length and Complexity

With business writing, the main focus is on the reader's ability to quickly absorb and react to the communication. Concise business writing uses a clean, straightforward sentence structure to improve understanding and retention. This is different from the prose of novels or the beat of poetry in which taking pleasure in the complexity of sentences is part of the experience. Business writing uses simpler sentences to be more concise and thus less likely to be misinterpreted.

Grammatically, there are three kinds of sentences. It's not especially important for you to be able to identify them in order to be a good business writer. However, taking a moment to think about how they work and what they do will help you become more concise and clear.


  • Simple sentences consist of a single independent clause:
  • Fido fetched. [A noun and a verb are all it takes to make a simple sentence.]
  • Whiskers ate her tuna. [This adds a direct object, "tuna", but it's still a simple sentence.]
  • Polly sat on her perch and whistled. [This includes a prepositional phrase, "on her perch", and a compound verb "sat" and "whistled", but it's still a simple sentence.]
  • Compound sentences consist of two (or more, but that's tricky) independent clauses attached by a comma and a conjunction:
  • Amanita threw the ball, and Fido fetched it. ["Amanita threw the ball" could stand alone as a sentence, as could "Fido fetched it". That structure is what makes this a compound sentence.]
  • Complex sentences consist of at least one dependent clause followed by at least one independent clause:
  • While Amanita looked for the ball, Fido chased a grasshopper. [Even though the part of the sentence before the comma has a subject, "Amanita", and a verb, "looked", the addition of "while" means it can't stand on its own as a sentence. "Fido chased a grasshopper" can stand alone, so it is an independent clause.]
  • Compound-complex sentences – you can probably figure this one out from the name and the example:
  • While Amanita looked for the ball, Fido chased a grasshopper, and Whiskers looked bored.


Active and Passive Voice

You've learned of active and passive voice earlier in the ESL series. Do you remember the difference between these two voices? In the simplest terms, an active voice sentence is written in the form of "A does B" (For example, "Carmen sings the song"). A passive voice sentence is written in the form of "B is done by A" (For example, "The song is sung by Carmen"). Both constructions are grammatically sound and correct.

Business writing is known for being direct and to the point in most situations, so you should favor active rather than passive verb constructions. But there are occasions when being too direct can make you sound insensitive. Consider the following refusal of a request for a raise:

    ACTIVE VOICE: You cannot have a raise at this time.
    PASSIVE VOICE: A raise can not be given at this time.

In this case, the goal of using the passive voice to soften the negativity of the message has made the message sound more considerate. If you are trying to avoid throwing someone under the bus, one strategy is to de-emphasize the actor or subject in the sentence. Bring out your sensitive side by knowing how to tactfully apply passive voice. Reserve passive verbs for the moment you need to say "no" in a message.


Tips for writing straightforward sentences that are appropriate and effective in business communication

1. Be careful not to string together too many ideas in the same sentence. A sentence like this is not only confusing, it also becomes really boring to read and doesn't sound very sophisticated:

  • Michael copy-edited the report, and the data tables were compiled, and the graphics looked wonderful. ( All three of these activities are part of the completion of a report, but they don't really belong in the same sentence.)

  • Michael copy-edited the report while the rest of the team compiled the data tables. The graphics looked wonderful. (By using a connector other than and – in this case, while – the sentence actually gives more information: that the copy editing and compiling happened at the same time. If you substitute "after which" for "while", you're actually telling a somewhat different story. Also, it's great that the graphics are impressive, but that idea doesn't belong in the same sentence.)


2. Starting a sentence with a dependent clause can sometimes bury the important news at the back end of the sentence. It's not forbidden to begin with dependent clauses, but be very careful about when you choose to do so. Think about the emotions a reader goes through when faced with a sentence like this:

  • While we suffered a dismal first quarter because of supply-chain issues, and our stock price wobbled a lot thanks to fluctuations in the Japanese market that caused the company to begin targeting employees for layoffs, the executive team is happy to report that we are on track for a profitable year. (That sentence is almost cruel in the amount of anxiety a reader has to suffer before getting to the good news. The whole point of that sentence is that the company is doing well. Yay! Therefore, the sentence should start with the important part.)
  • The executive team is happy to report that we are on track for a profitable year, even though we suffered . . .(There's a whole different response when the sentence tells the important news first.)

3. Clear is good; simple can be mind-numbing, so vary your sentence structures. Imagine an entire report full of this:

  • Profits were up. This is good. Production increased by six percent. Employees received bonuses in two of four quarters. The stock split. (Even though you are reading excellent news, you're about to keel over from the monotony, aren't you? Writing cleanly and concisely doesn't mean writing like a robot. Think about how the small nuggets of information relate to one another, and combine them in sentences that make sense, put the important news first, and show that you take pride in writing well.)
  • We are happy to report that profits are up, and our shares have split. This results from a six-percent increase in production, and we were happy to reward our hard-working employees with bonuses in two of four quarters. (Not only is it possible to read this passage without dozing off, but it also gives more information by showing the relationship among the bits of information given.)


Finally, watch your wordiness. As you write and edit, ask yourself whether you are using several words when there's one perfectly good one that would suffice. At the same time, be careful of turning a single sentence into a paragraph by stringing together every idea you've ever had. Findings from Goddard (1989) suggest that sentence length is related to reading comprehension. This research suggests that between 20 and 25 words are the maximum for solid comprehension.

Sentence Length     Comprehension Rate
8 words                     100%
15 words                   90%
19 words                   80%
28 words                   50%

Remember, your goal is not to make your sentences short, your goal is to convey your ideas clearly and to avoid ambiguity. That said, the more complex the material you are discussing, the more straightforward and clean your sentences need to be.

Source: Lumen Learning,
Creative Commons License This work is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution 4.0 License.


Saylor Academy Knowledge Check

Complete this question to check your understanding of concise writing. The next question will appear after you select an answer.

Last modified: Tuesday, December 14, 2021, 5:27 PM