I wake up every day at 7am, I do some house chores, make breakfast for my family, after I go to work. Later in the day I come back home, make dinner for the family and then spend some time with family.
- The first sentence of the paragraph contains a comma between the two independent clauses: “I wake up every day at 7 am” and “I do some house chores”. Instead of a comma, a conjunction (like “and”) or a period can be used.
- In addition, in the last part of the first line, there is the word “after” which can be replaced by “then” or “and then”. As a result, the sentence has a more realistic meaning.
- Moving on to the second sentence, after the phrase “Later in the day”, it’s suitable to add a comma. Furthermore, as we can see a list of actions (come home, make dinner for the family, spend some time with them), there should be a comma after “and”.
Final Version:
I wake up every day at 7 am. I do some house chores, make breakfast for my family, then I go to work. Later in the day, I come back home, make dinner for the family, and then spend some time with my family.