Review Your Writing Discussion in Unit 4 of the ESL001

Review Your Writing Discussion in Unit 4 of the ESL001

by Ma. Consuelo Cordova -
Number of replies: 3

  1. I like to go to the park in the evening it is very relaxing and peaceful there I usually take my dog with me and we enjoy our time together.

This sentence is missing proper punctuation to separate the different ideas. It should be broken up into multiple sentences or include commas where necessary.

Revised version:
I like to go to the park in the evening. It is very relaxing and peaceful there. I usually take my dog with me, and we enjoy our time together.

Using correct punctuation clarifies the sentence by properly separating the ideas. The original version made it difficult to determine where one thought ended and another began. Adding full stops and commas makes it easier to read and understand.

  1. When I was a child I loved to play outside with my friends we would ride our bikes play hide and seek and have so much fun.

This sentence needs commas after the introductory phrase and between the different activities to make it clearer.

Revised version:
When I was a child, I loved to play outside with my friends. We would ride our bikes, play hide and seek, and have so much fun.

The correct punctuation helps separate the introductory phrase from the main sentence and makes the list of activities more structured and readable.


In reply to Ma. Consuelo Cordova

Re: Review Your Writing Discussion in Unit 4 of the ESL001

by Adisu Yirga -
Here are some sentences I found in the ESL001 writing review forum:

I usually wake up at 6:00 am and do a bit of exercise then do my morning rituals and eat breakfast around 8:00 am. I usually do a bit of work at home like video editing the time depends on the amount of work. If it's a college day I usually don't accept work. I eat my dinner at 9:00pm and hit the bed at 11:00 pm

This is how I use the punctuation mark on the sentence for more clarity:

I usually wake up at 6:00 a.m., and do a bit of exercise, then complete my morning rituals and eat breakfast around 8:00 a.m. I usually do some work at home, like video editing; the time depends on the amount of work. If it's a college day, I usually don't accept work. I eat dinner at 9:00 p.m. and go to bed at 11:00 p.m.

By using the correct punctuation mark guides the reader through the flow of a sentence, making it easier to understand the intended meaning. It helps clarify the relationships between words, phrases, and clauses.