Here are some sentences I found in the ESL001 writing review forum:
1- My day start at 7 o'clock when I hear the clock i wake up and quickly I get.
1- My day start at 7 o'clock when I hear the clock i wake up and quickly I get.
The mistakes in the original sentence were: missing capitalization at
the beginning, "start" should be "starts", a
missing period after "7 o'clock" to separate two independent clauses, a
missing comma after "clock" to separate the dependent clause, and the
sentence was incomplete ("quickly I get" should be "quickly get ready").
Correction: My day starts at 7 o'clock. When I hear the clock, I wake up and quickly get ready.
2- Immediately afterwards I go to bathroom and wash my face, brush my teeth.
The mistakes in the original sentence were: a missing comma after
"afterwards", a missing "the" before
"bathroom", and a missing "and" before
"brush my teeth" to properly connect the list.
Correction: Immediately afterwards, I go to the bathroom, wash my face, and brush my teeth.